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The orange jumpsuit really didn't suit her complexion.  But, then, they're not exactly intended to be fashion statements.   The slow steps with which she moved, her lank hair and sunken cheeks weren't her either.

I frowned as she took a seat across from me, "What were you thinking?" I tried to sound curious instead of judgmental.

I needn't have tried. She simply lifted a shoulder listlessly, dismissing my question. "Nothing, really."

Her appearance already had me so shaken, her attitude disturbed me even more, "Then why?"
She lifted her eyes to meet mine, and there was such pain in their blue gray depths, so much strain that had pushed her to the breaking point, I had to look away.  Shame that I hadn't seen her pain sooner filled me. Could I have helped?  I had no way of knowing, but I wished I'd been able to try.
Her quiet voice emphasized the hopelessness of her response, "What's it matter?"
This was written for a challenge I posted in my journal a long time ago.
No one really took me up on the challenge until recently, when ~FLPQueen did with What was he thinking.

The challenge is here.
Just so you don't have to go following bunches of links, the summary of the challenge is this:

Dialogue all by itself is just like talking heads, as pointed out in *Auriethepixie's blog entry. You have to have action.
So, the challenge was to take a bit of dialogue I provided, and write it into a scene, just to show how many different ways the same dialogue can go.

The dialogue provided for the challenge was this:
"What were you thinking?"
"Nothing, really."
"Then why?"
"What's it matter?"
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I like this concept!